The Blood Element - My VA fanfic

Okay, so it's Monday now (probably going on Tuesday in most places). But I said I'd update, and so I have.
Chapter two is now up.

Awsome!! I'll read it!!

I really like it!! You gotta write more!!

Nightchild wrote:

I really like it!! You gotta write more!!

I'm glad you liked it!! There will be more. I'm working on it. I just can't make any promises on a date though.

I can't wait to read more But no pressure
It's a great chapter, I left you a review on fanfic.net, it's a shame you only have one there.

Phoenix wrote:

I can't wait to read more But no pressure
It's a great chapter, I left you a review on fanfic.net, it's a shame you only have one there.

Tell me about it. I'm trying to think of things I can do to get more readers and haven't really come up with anything. Anyway, I appreciate the reviews!! lol If you've noticed, I'll give a shout out to anyone who does.

dimkaluv wrote:

Tell me about it. I'm trying to think of things I can do to get more readers and haven't really come up with anything. Anyway, I appreciate the reviews!! lol If you've noticed, I'll give a shout out to anyone who does.

People are probably skeptical about the OC thing, most of them want to read about Dimitri or Adrian. You really deserve much much more reviews, but I don't know how to get people to finally start reading and reviewing...

Phoenix wrote:

People are probably skeptical about the OC thing, most of them want to read about Dimitri or Adrian. You really deserve much much more reviews, but I don't know how to get people to finally start reading and reviewing...

Hence the reason for all of the "Last Sacrifice: my version"s and "Spirit Bound: dimitri leaves rose pregnant with his evil spawn" and "rose and adrian hook up this is a story about their bastard children i suck at summarys". It's all fanservice. Not that I'm not guilty of something similar, but still.

I'm slightly frustrated.

If anyone's got any ideas on what I could do to get more readers, I'd love to hear them. Maybe I'll have to write a really bad Last Sacrifice: my version to get more people to check out my other/better fics. lol In fact, maybe I will. I just need to come up with some really bad pov switching first. And spelling mistakes that are believable. Except I'm such a nazi for that kind of stuff, I dunno if I can. lol

dimkaluv wrote:

Hence the reason for all of the "Last Sacrifice: my version"s and "Spirit Bound: dimitri leaves rose pregnant with his evil spawn" and "rose and adrian hook up this is a story about their bastard children i suck at summarys". It's all fanservice. Not that I'm not guilty of something similar, but still.

I'm slightly frustrated.

If anyone's got any ideas on what I could do to get more readers, I'd love to hear them. Maybe I'll have to write a really bad Last Sacrifice: my version to get more people to check out my other/better fics. lol In fact, maybe I will. I just need to come up with some really bad pov switching first. And spelling mistakes that are believable. Except I'm such a nazi for that kind of stuff, I dunno if I can. lol

If I had a penny for every Last Sacrifice: my version I came across...
I suck at summaries - I've seen that so many times and I just don't get the point. If you can't write a summary, why would you expect me to believe you can write a story? And how hard is it to write a summary anyway?
And don't forget Dimitri leaves Rose for Tasha but doesn't know that Rose is pregnant.
That's fanfiction.net for you

Phoenix wrote:

If I had a penny for every Last Sacrifice: my version I came across...
I suck at summaries - I've seen that so many times and I just don't get the point. If you can't write a summary, why would you expect me to believe you can write a story? And how hard is it to write a summary anyway?
And don't forget Dimitri leaves Rose for Tasha but doesn't know that Rose is pregnant.
That's fanfiction.net for you

That's exactly what I thought. I think it's cool when someone uses a sentence or two from their actual fic as the summary. I've done that before. But ohhh writing summaries can be really hard sometimes. lol I think it took me like two hours to write mine. And it's only like 100 words. But mostly I was trying to make it as interesting as possible. I had to think of which words would pull people in and everything since I figured that not as many people would want to read it due to the OCs. A lot of thought/effort went behind my summary. I spent a good deal of those two hours on thesaurus.com. Maybe I should change my brief summary to something else. lol But tricking people might make them angry.

lol "summarys" was my best jab at an intentional misspelling. Sad.

dimkaluv wrote:

That's exactly what I thought. I think it's cool when someone uses a sentence or two from their actual fic as the summary. I've done that before. But ohhh writing summaries can be really hard sometimes. lol I think it took me like two hours to write mine. And it's only like 100 words. But mostly I was trying to make it as interesting as possible. I had to think of which words would pull people in and everything since I figured that not as many people would want to read it due to the OCs. A lot of thought/effort went behind my summary. I spent a good deal of those two hours on thesaurus.com. Maybe I should change my brief summary to something else. lol But tricking people might make them angry.

lol "summarys" was my best jab at an intentional misspelling. Sad.

Yes, it's good to give it a little thought, to think of something that's going to make people want to read your story. And you can always use a sentence from the story - I sometimes do that. But, like I said, if writing a summary is too difficult for someone, then I don't think writing a story can go much better.
As for your summary, I think it's good. Though if you change it to My version of Last Sacrifice, you'll probably get more readers

Phoenix wrote:

Yes, it's good to give it a little thought, to think of something that's going to make people want to read your story. And you can always use a sentence from the story - I sometimes do that. But, like I said, if writing a summary is too difficult for someone, then I don't think writing a story can go much better.
As for your summary, I think it's good. Though if you change it to My version of Last Sacrifice, you'll probably get more readers

Maybe I'll use a particularly profound sentence from my fic. I don't want to fool people into reading it because I know I'd be irritated if it happened to me. lol But if I'm more vague about what my fic's about, maybe they'll click it to find out more. They won't know about the OCs until they're already inside...

shhhhh....

"Last Sacrifice: my version" can be my Plan B if this other thing doesn't work out.

dimkaluv wrote:

Okay, so it's Monday now (probably going on Tuesday in most places). But I said I'd update, and so I have.
Chapter two is now up.

Thanks, Ashley. ^_^
And don't worry, i have a way to gather more people to the fic.
Did you notice one of my friends, Luna Lumine, bringing you the review, earlier?

Tonystark616 wrote:

dimkaluv wrote:

Okay, so it's Monday now (probably going on Tuesday in most places). But I said I'd update, and so I have.
Chapter two is now up.

Thanks, Ashley. ^_^
And don't worry, i have a way to gather more people to the fic.
Did you notice one of my friends, Luna Lumine, bringing you the review, earlier?

She's your friend? Cool. I really appreciate that Tony!! Thank you!!

dimkaluv wrote:

Maybe I'll use a particularly profound sentence from my fic. I don't want to fool people into reading it because I know I'd be irritated if it happened to me. lol But if I'm more vague about what my fic's about, maybe they'll click it to find out more. They won't know about the OCs until they're already inside...

shhhhh....

That's a good idea. They think it's about Dimitri or Adrian, they start reading and then realize it's not, but it's still an interesting story. I think it might work.

Phoenix wrote:

That's a good idea. They think it's about Dimitri or Adrian, they start reading and then realize it's not, but it's still an interesting story. I think it might work.

Now to decide on which profound sentence(s) to use... Maybe something from a later chapter. I'll have to think about it. Obviously if this is going to work, I can't include OCxOC anymore. I'm changing it RIGHT NOW.

dimkaluv wrote:

Tonystark616 wrote:

dimkaluv wrote:

Okay, so it's Monday now (probably going on Tuesday in most places). But I said I'd update, and so I have.
Chapter two is now up.

Thanks, Ashley. ^_^
And don't worry, i have a way to gather more people to the fic.
Did you notice one of my friends, Luna Lumine, bringing you the review, earlier?

She's your friend? Cool. I really appreciate that Tony!! Thank you!!

You're welcome, Ashley. *bows down*
Now once the combat starts up, i hope that it'll have all the intensity that would equal to at least that of Disturbed's most intense songs[like Stupify, for one thing!] ^_^

I was thinking about using the first *counts* eight sentences from the prologue as my brief summary. What do you guys think? Only problem I can see is that people will be reading the same thing twice back-to-back. If not those sentences, which do you think would be better? Remember, we're trying to pull more people in to read it.

dimkaluv wrote:

I was thinking about using the first *counts* eight sentences from the prologue as my brief summary. What do you guys think? Only problem I can see is that people will be reading the same thing twice back-to-back. If not those sentences, which do you think would be better? Remember, we're trying to pull more people in to read it.

Yeah, I like those. It would certainly make me go and check it out.

Phoenix wrote:

Yeah, I like those. It would certainly make me go and check it out.

Okay, so it's changed now. Let's see how this goes.

In the meantime, I'm having a sort of crisis with my soundtrack.

dimkaluv wrote:

Phoenix wrote:

Yeah, I like those. It would certainly make me go and check it out.

Okay, so it's changed now. Let's see how this goes.

In the meantime, I'm having a sort of crisis with my soundtrack.

This is going to be one epic satire when it comes to the *badfic* agreed?
As for the real fic, how do you plan to raise intensity?

Tonystark616 wrote:

dimkaluv wrote:

Phoenix wrote:

Yeah, I like those. It would certainly make me go and check it out.

Okay, so it's changed now. Let's see how this goes.

In the meantime, I'm having a sort of crisis with my soundtrack.

This is going to be one epic satire when it comes to the *badfic* agreed?
As for the real fic, how do you plan to raise intensity?

lol "badfic"? All I did was change the brief summary to something a little more vague. It's the first couple sentences from my prologue. I'm not trying to fool anyone. lol If I did that, I'd have changed the *title* to something retarded like "Last Sacrifice: what i think happens".

I might write something stupid like that anyway for kicks. Probably that one would get more reviews than my actual *good* fic that I work very hard on.

dimkaluv wrote:

Tonystark616 wrote:

dimkaluv wrote:

Phoenix wrote:

Yeah, I like those. It would certainly make me go and check it out.

Okay, so it's changed now. Let's see how this goes.

In the meantime, I'm having a sort of crisis with my soundtrack.

This is going to be one epic satire when it comes to the *badfic* agreed?
As for the real fic, how do you plan to raise intensity?

lol "badfic"? All I did was change the brief summary to something a little more vague. It's the first couple sentences from my prologue. I'm not trying to fool anyone. lol If I did that, I'd have changed the *title* to something retarded like "Last Sacrifice: what i think happens".

I might write something stupid like that anyway for kicks. Probably that one would get more reviews than my actual *good* fic that I work very hard on.

I meant *badfic* as in the thoughts you are contemplating on doing when it comes to Last Sacrifice, that is.

I just hope that the *Good* fic will finally get the reviews it deserves[points to T.B.E!]

Tonystark616 wrote:

I meant *badfic* as in the thoughts you are contemplating on doing when it comes to Last Sacrifice, that is.

I just hope that the *Good* fic will finally get the reviews it deserves[points to T.B.E!]

I'll just write whatever random crap comes to mind. lol

I'm glad people think my *good* fic deserves to get reviews. I feel that way too, but of course, I'm biased.

dimkaluv wrote:

Tonystark616 wrote:

I meant *badfic* as in the thoughts you are contemplating on doing when it comes to Last Sacrifice, that is.

I just hope that the *Good* fic will finally get the reviews it deserves[points to T.B.E!]

I'll just write whatever random crap comes to mind. lol

I'm glad people think my *good* fic deserves to get reviews. I feel that way too, but of course, I'm biased.

So where to start in the randomness satire?

We need to get more people on there, or else let us bring in a Herculean effort on our parts, agreed?