The first Chapter of one of my stories!

RPOV
It was time. Graduation. I couldn’t wait! Lissa and I were going to be living the high life. “Hey girly! You ready?” Lissa asked coming out from the bathroom. To say she looked like an angel would be an understatement. Her hair was in light ringlets and she was wearing a light blue pastel dress that hugged her small yet existing curves and her eyes were shining with so much excitement it was wonderful. “Wow, if I was Adrian I would be so into you!” Ever since I came back from seeing my real father, a small graduation present my mother decided to give me early, and Lissa broke up with Christian and started dating Adrian she has been much happier and her moods through the bond have been enlightening me even. “Haha, well I hope he likes it! You look pretty stunning yourself. Trying to impress anyone special?” Lissa asked me with a raised eyebrow in wonder. I wouldn’t blame her. I was wearing a stunning burgundy dress, strapless of course, that was form fitting and shouldn’t be school appropriate. Oh, well. Their problem not mine. “Well, there is one person…” I trailed off. Lissa knew about Dimitri and I but we never really talked about it. The thought freaked her out, of course she never told me it was just through the bond that I felt it. “Aww, Rosie has a boyfriend.” Mia came in mimicking Lissa like a baby. “Who is it Rose? Jesse? Ralph? As the inside scoop who is it and how much did they pay you?” She said jokingly. Ever since her and Lissa cleared everything up about Andre the three of us have been really close. Though, I still don’t trust her enough to tell her my secret. “Well, lets see… I would tell you but then I’d have to pretend you were a Strigoi and kill you!” I said as I sprung out towards her. “HA. Take that evil Mia.” I said making the motions of a stake with my hot curling iron. “Wow… your original.” Mia said looking at the clock. “Come on! I am not going to be late for my own graduation!” Mia whined.

All the seniors were sitting down in the bleachers, Mori to the right Dhampairs to the left. The names were about to be read for who was getting as a Mori or guardian. “Edward Castille” Alberta read, you could see some of us cringe because before Spokane Mason would have been called first. “… Vasilissa Dragomir. She will also have Guardian Dimitri Belikov with her.” WHAT! I almost stood up to object but I couldn’t without making a seen. Eddie looked at me full of sorrow and a little fear. The latter was probably because my face looked like I was about to kill. Finally it took me five more pairs to get myself together. When it got to my name I was in a panic. “Rosemarie Hathaway” Who was I going to get? Ralf? Jesse? No, no, no I would deffinatly throw a fit. The only person I wanted to be with and she was gone. I was still ranting when I heard Alberta call my charge. “Christian Ozera.” WHAT!?!? Oh, god. This is twenty times worse then Jesse or Ralf. Well I have to go seeing as all eyes turned to me. After getting my diploma and promise mark I stormed out of the room very fast.

“Rose, open the door. Please.” Lissa begged me. Well I can’t be mad at her. She is my best friend anyway isn’t she? So I let her in and we started to talk. “Hey, you do know everything is gonna be ok right? Even though I’m going to be at the royal courts and Christian is going to Dartmouth in New Hampshire for college and well… we will be seeing each other… a lot. So, smile?” It was then that I noticed I was crying. I then wiped my tears and sat up. “When are you leaving?” I asked her. “About a week. But I talked to Christian and he said something about having to leave early to move in with his aunt Tasha.” Oh great. Tasha is really great, don’t get me wrong, but it is just too weird living with my boyfriends ex. Too bad for me. I have to make light of it I guess.

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NO offence or anything but that doesn't sound anything like how the charatcters speak :S i can't imagine lissa saying to rose "hey girly!" it's just weird. i think you should try work on a story thats not about vampire academy and more like another kind of vampire love story and just make it all up like richelle did. i'm also trying to write a vampire book and it takes a long time but if ur passionate then just go for it

Although i was highly mistaken, im sorry. i have now read your work well half of the boook and think it's incerdiably good except dimitri doesn't act like dimitri how richelle wrote him, he's much more affectionate but that's GOOOD because it gives us a view on how he could be and how we really WANT him to be well done i can't wait to here how it ends.